Science is for those who learn; poetry, for those who know. — Joseph Roux, Meditations of a Parish Priest
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To be a poet is a condition, not a profession. — Robert Frost
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Everything one invents is true, you may be perfectly sure of that. Poetry is as precise as geometry. — Gustave Flaubert

Tuesday, July 21, 2009

~ The Voices... ~




Inwardly the critic
Opinionated through and through
My inner voice conflicted
But what's a girl to do?

They say you're fine conversing
If yourself, you do not answer
Well give this girl the bestest meds
'Cause me, myself do banter

Left brain, right brain disagree
The logic and abstract clash
People stare, start whispering
As I verbally kick my ass

My inner voice will try and soothe
"Just breathe and let it go"
I frown, not having none of that
It physically comes to blows

Two black eyes, a fat lip too
I knock myself to the floor
I scream "Say Uncle, admit defeat!"
My inner voice jeers and yells "More!"

I pummel and hit, start seeing stars
Pretty colors and sparkling lights
People surround me, and some old fart
Waves down and tells me "Night Night!"

So now dear friends, here I lay
In this jacket I'm strapped, and I itch
Don't answer your evil little voices
I can't scratch, and it's really a bitch!

Told ya!
SHUT UP!!!
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~© Bobbie Sandlin~
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For OSI Prompt: Inner Voices. It's got some language to this, but it wouldn't be convincing with gosh and golly gee wiz. It started out as an enlightened poem. I had 10 stanzas, just word playing to get a feel and direction, and then a flow hit full blast and it turned into "Soul vs. World." So by the time I got done with it, I was goofy, kept thinking of my friend and conversations on inner voices (we have many an inside joke) lol. Then this poetry flowed from there.

11 comments:

indicaspecies said...

Hahaha..this is fabulous poetry!!
Thank you.

SandyCarlson said...

Those inner voices pack some punch!

Michelle Johnson said...

LOL, this is great. I love how you fought with those inner voices and didn't necessarily win. At least the battle was fair. Hope all is well. Have a great day.

Jim said...

Bobbie, I love your story here. Minus a little overstatement this is an often untold tale. I wish I could remember a not winning memory I have suppressed.
My wish for you? I do hope they put a blanket over you when it is cool. :-)
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mypoeticpath said...

I really like what you've done with this prompt Bobbie. And, I hear ya...I've got the same conversation going on at times. Nice one!

if said...

there is a lot to say about voices--you have done it well

Patti said...

That was good!!! I liked how it progressed from the beginning to the end- quite a story!!! Great interpretation of the prompt~

gabrielle said...

I know this inner critic well. She's relentless. You put up a good fight.

Lela Blonde said...

Very humerous...Keep putting up a good fight...though. :)

Bobbie Sandlin said...

LOL I just wanted to drop in and say Thank You for all the wonderful comments! I'm glad you like it. If anything, this proves I need to let my hair down more often lol. ♥ you all!

zoya gautam said...

. like many others ,i believe too that it's never easy to write ' humor ' ..

really enjoyed reading ur poem bobbie ..

many thanks! ..

(& till the next fight ..all the bestest !)

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